Can someone check my essay for grammar mistakes(I’m not done) and also tell me how to group some stuff together

Answer:
Well I think you should tone down saying AVID alot and don't replace it with saying something like "you", Also you have forgotten to put a space after a period sometimes to make it look neat and thought through, if you can also say what good you can do with new said knowledge, and under the "Prepare me" you say "ne way"? Also without a capital.